How Comparison-Contrast Fits Your Purpose and Audience-Note taking

Suggestions: Using Comparison and Contrast in an essay.
1) Be sure your subjects are at least somewhat alike
2) Stay focuse on your purpose
3) Formulate a strong thesis
4) Select the points to be discussed
5) Organize the points to be discussed
6)Supply the reader with clear transitions

Commentary
*Purpose and thesis
*Points of support and overall organization
*Sequence of points, organicational cues, and paragraph development
*Combining patterns of development
*A problem with unity
*Conclusion
*Revising the first draft

Comparison & Contrast

Today is September 26, 2009. We didn't have any class today so our second papers on narration could be graded. We're going to get to see them Monday. I'm excited and hope my paper receives a good grade although I'm not quite as confident about this last paper. Okay here is the different ways comparison and contrast essays are written:
*One-side-at-a-time method of organization where you discuss everything relevant of one side first before moving on to the next side or similarities.
*Point-by-point method of organization is organization where you alternate back and forth

Salvation

Salvation is another narrative essay that focuses on the church's way of saving lives through a series of steps towards salvation or being saved from sin. This article is by Langston Hughes encouraged by an aunt I believe as a young african american who became scared out of his wits and experienced that not every saved person was truely wise but sinful indeed in lying and eventually he approaches Jesus or God and is saved.

The Price We Pay

The price we pay was an excellent Narrative by Adam Mayblum who states that although they tried to tear us apart we remain united they tried to cause us fear and we overcome it and stand together. Famous words indeed throughout writing his narrative from a viewpoint of the twin towers collapsing and losing co-workers he'd known impacting his life. He wrote so as to say to "NEVER FORGET." The Price We Pay is a narrative on a real life story of the collapse of twin towers. A one by one expression of making it slowly down stair wells and having to leave cherished ones behind and finally seeing the second tower collapse once outside of the first tower themselves. A heart-stopping memory, the narrative proved to be very interesting.

Shooting An Elephant

"Shooting an Elephant" was an excellent Narration by George Orwell. In whom a larger number of people hated a police official(the main character) in Moulmein in Lower Burma.(hence the point of view from Orwell's perspective) The former British colony of India is where Orwell is best known for his novels. He served with the Indian imperial police and worked at various jobs in London and Paris. Caught in an internal conflict with himself in a group of people in India he has the choice to shoot an elephant which is worse because he knows is tons worth of work loading animal verses not shooting the large animal at all risking more deaths and another must or elephant hormonal rampage during the same season. The story works from very interesting points and leaves Orwell narrating from the main character he debates to kill the elephant finally shooting it, slowly by the ear and neck down, dying in the end. Giving him a sense to redeem his self worth as well in front of the group of people whose lives or livelihood were being destroyed.

Narration

Narration is the centuries worth of lifetime stories told by our ancestors. The Longman Reader Ninth Edition mentions that in ancient times warriors gathered in halls to listen to bards praise in song the exploit of epic heroes. Narration according to our book means the telling a single story or several related stories. Narration according to www.dictionary.com is a noun that means: 1) something narrated; an account, story or narrative. 2)the act or process of narrating 3)a recital of events in, esp. in chronological order as a story narrated in the poem or the exposition of a drama. 4)Rhetoric (in classical speech) the third part, the exposition of a question. Narration is powerful. Each public speaker no matter whom, makes an impression.

My Final Draft

Today I wrote my final draft! I'm so glad to finally be done. I might take it to the learning center to a different person one more time. I have my title as my thesis and I think I find that there is some unity towards the end of the paper. It's supposed to be a descriptive essay that is 2 1/4 pages long that talks about a particular experience as one of my favorites living on a farm in the country. It was when Kim and Erin came over with their kids. I'm really hoping that it is good enough and that they'll really like it.

Review of "Flavio's Home" & "The Storm This Time"

1)Flavio's Home is a description based story of a poor home that was documented in order to publish it as a public wariness and provide aid to the family of the da Silva home. With pure poverty the book describes it as the "most savage of all afflictions." The poverty is described of claiming victims who can't mobilize their efforts. Often survivors lacking the effort to digest the little food they scrounged the faminous times kept growing like the spreading of cancer. Catacumba was the name of the place where they found the first victim named Flavio. They offered furniture to the journalists who interviewed their family which were old worn out boxes. They would scrape by with beans and small amounts of food they would worry about sparingly supplying throughout the family.

2)The Storm This Time that covered the Urban Floodplain and deaths during and after Hurricane Katrina. The author remembers arriving at Baton rouge and seeing them label the doors in houses in certain ways to keep track of the statistics of death rates, living and homes with no people or no survivors. Around New Orleans, getting instruction from a carpet store giving out samples the writer gets a call from New Orleans Aquarium. With FBI agents and firefighters, the french quarters still intact and the National Guard to work together in cleaning up much of the mess with volunteers a perspective is given on Life After Katrina. Also on what afterward occurred to be a disappeared town.

September 4, 2009

Today is September 6, 2009. Two days ago we had our review for our first drafts in English Composition I. I took my draft to the learning center and had it reviewed a third time. I'm starting to re-write my second draft into my final draft for Wednesday. Two people from class revised my paper and a third from the learning center. Here is Review for Sister Flowers article we read:

1)Sister Flowers- Sister Bertha Flowers is a character described by Maya Angelou or otherwise known as Marguerite who is easily embarassed by her unformal English speaking mother, Mrs. Henderson. Marguerite looks up to Sister Flowers the aristocrat of Black Stamps. Marguerite never actually has first connected Sister flowers to the sweet smell of food until she invites her into her home and acquaints herself with her more. Marguerite is practically a poor slave girl when she first meets Sister Flowers except she has her freedom but a low self esteem after moping around for months after being raped. Sister Flowers was the first to throw her a life line and make things better for Marguerite. The book quotes, "For nearly a year[after I was raped] I sopped around the house, the store the school and the church, like an old biscuit, dirty and inedible."